# Response 1

I really like the set up for this scene but I ended up a bit confused about the conclusion. Is the dad having an affair or are they the son’s? I wonder if it’s stronger if the dad is guilty, and we get to watch all the tricks he tries to cover his tracks (including falsely blaming his son). I also wonder whether the mom would be so forthcoming about her surgery so soon in the scene? It feels more like a climactic reveal. Nice work!

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Video artist working at The New York Times. I write a weekly newsletter about visual storytelling and creativity. https://adamwestbrook.substack.com/