Adam Westbrook
1 min readAug 30, 2017

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#FEEDBACK 11

I agree with Sandra. I’d also add that the alarm saying “First day at school” feels a bit too obvious. There are some more subtle ways to signpost that it’s his first day (maybe a good luck note from mum, a new backpack, something like that).

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Adam Westbrook

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